tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4638919385338097440.post2401280983045912658..comments2023-03-30T08:24:40.396-07:00Comments on The Story Club: Requesting Critiquing. Annahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04253596524289482323noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4638919385338097440.post-65339082905096078072014-05-20T16:49:20.782-07:002014-05-20T16:49:20.782-07:00I don't know how I found your blog, but I'...I don't know how I found your blog, but I'm really glad I did :)<br />It's been such a long time since I read a story like this....so beautiful.<br />If you want constructive criticism..I'll add that you could indent the lines appropriately to make the story easier to read..<br />Nice work!<br />Anya- http://yeahimateenageblogger.blogspot.comanniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02420268411538718191noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4638919385338097440.post-38866207950648206062014-04-02T20:25:44.282-07:002014-04-02T20:25:44.282-07:00Quite a quaint little story.
As far as grammar goe...Quite a quaint little story.<br />As far as grammar goes, nothing outside of what Violet pointed out, but I would advise you to review your sentence construction and excessive indentation. You don't need to create a new paragraph every other sentence, it can disorientate your readers. <br />It honestly isn't exactly my type of a story, I encourage you to try something more original and interesting, but overall this was a typical, adorable short story.<br />Liahttp://www.lia.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4638919385338097440.post-42477474424706262632014-03-19T21:33:27.910-07:002014-03-19T21:33:27.910-07:00That's so cute! I honestly can't find anyt...That's so cute! I honestly can't find anything wrong with it except you said "you're" instead of "your" " and "with" instead of "will" in the part where it said "and you’re cold leaves with turn green" and "know" instead of "now" in the part where it said "Nobody will like you know" :)Rebekahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09282928921447998191noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4638919385338097440.post-36576604541701515082014-01-21T11:45:31.433-08:002014-01-21T11:45:31.433-08:00Thanks so much, Amy!Thanks so much, Amy!•Maddie•https://www.blogger.com/profile/12430320591203601384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4638919385338097440.post-2269653682254706012014-01-19T10:45:04.768-08:002014-01-19T10:45:04.768-08:00That was beautiful! I loved it! :-)
God Bless, Am...That was beautiful! I loved it! :-)<br /><br />God Bless, Amy<br /><3 Jesus was my first love <3<br />living738.blogspot.comAmyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00257256854174884920noreply@blogger.com